Part One 修改
1. 修改前反思
(1)过多强调时间(4次)催促的意味比较重,读者会感受到压力,怎么改?
(2)为了使用新学的短语 行文不够简洁
(3) 层次上应该先问对方进度怎样 还是先阐明催促理由?
2. 修改后
Dear Joseph,
How have you been ?
Just trying to check in with you regarding where we are on that display board Henry left us last week. It is an urgent order that required on April 17th. To make that goal possible, we probably need to deliver the electronic version file to our advertising agency before April 15th. The earlier the board can be printed, the better. Hence, I am wondering if you could send me the proposed photos tomorrow. In that case, I would work out the layout in time.
Also, I am happy to coordinate any assistance you might need.
Yours,
Sophie