0516 写作直播1：Two Parts
综合写作 Integrated writing
阅读中最重要的：因果关系
Lect中Prof一定会反驳说法：
跟因果相反的细节全记
make summary:
听力中的教授
20min/150-225words
一般 200-300 正常：讲清楚，不啰嗦。有效率，信息多。
内容引述：
passage 要改写；lecture 可照抄
key words + own wording.
独立写作 Independent writing
given topic:
write an essay 学术短论
效率最重要！
评分主体：人 + 机器（查雷同）
writing to communicate 思路；
口语35思路需要；
时态注意（检查的时候）
看文章：what what why
locating important information
阅读笔记好，听力有重点
automaticly dispear听力：反驳www的相关细节，动词+名词，实词
脚踏实地，实在的描述方式对笔记进行补全：对应点 + 逻辑
词数要求：
》》
时间安排：
15分钟 plan + write；
5分钟检查：
- 分段：全顶格 中间空一行 易读easy to follow 逻辑清晰可析 简约不简单
- 时态：引述这个动词用一般现在，引的内容跟原文一样。
- 检查拼写：s
》》 独立写作 300+
最主要目的：把事情讲清楚（这个世界上最高的成本：沟通）
Integrated Writing Scoring Rubric
只看No1，只往最高标准走。最高分做了什么，你就去做。
A response at this level successfully selects the important information from the lecture and coherently and accurately presents this information in relation to the relevant information presented in the reading.
The response is well organized, and occasional language errors that are present do not result in inaccurate or imprecise presentation of content or connections.
- 信息提取（阅读、听力中的点）；
- 逻辑关系（点与点的对应）；
- 表述准确（句型、词汇要求较低）
写作，必须记笔记
阅读：先果后因
听力：先因后果
occasional表示frequency比较低的偶尔错误；minor是小错误；
熟练的写手，知道区别
Independent Writing Socring
- 切题
- 逻辑严密、内容充实
- 连贯、整体感
- 语言熟练、句法多样、用词准确、语言地道、个别错误
先想具体例子 - 再提出抽象概念
basic needs 刚需；
personal interests 科技装备 appearance technology；
off-price / discounting 购买动机。incentive
** 需要 + 喜欢 + 划算 **
写作有分段，不需要 first second last，口语中
最后一段已经，
完全不同意 or 不完全同意
如果有些时候出现让步表达方式，将不利条件转化为无害条件，或有利条件。
部分不同意 也是 不同意
which will you to prefer：段落内/间 对比，段段分高下，段间
三选一：高1 点2（有章法）
effectively addresses the topic and task
is well organized and well developed, using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications, and/or details
displays unity, progression, and coherence
displays consistent facility(熟练) in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety, appropriate word choice, and idiomaticity(地道 用漂亮而准确的动词), though it may have minor lexical or grammatical errors
切题
逻辑严密
前面的主题句 抽象 abstract，后面解释 explain 包含关系 或因果关系，最后例子或details。
avoid to be 土
social change + technology change；全幅扩展
simultaneously, should have done,
不跟low人在一起，免得自己免得low
siginificate 意义重大的 影响深远 change + 抽象词 历史意义
军事天才+政治，history teach us how to judge 脑中有史 心中有
siginficant invention,
create problems 引发问题, generate controversy 引发争论.
hardwork can invite luck,
背静 引出文章中的关键词和核心词 parents children
Throughout(比in更有贯穿的感觉) history, ...
Actually, along with the development of technology, this is an inevitable phenomenon and there is no way to avoid it. 只有固定搭配才可以这样重复，沉鱼落雁闭月羞花。
Children
今昔对比，other media, children mostly acquired basic knowledge of themselves and the world around them from their parents. 没有举例子，确提供很多细节。
Also, advanced means of communication provides children with countless listeners, 因为有各种通讯工具
no other outlets, 没有其他渠道 出口，internet connects people around the globe, 换掉world秋裤，
live in a huge online community 在线，they can meet and talk without being blocked by time and distance. 包含 + 因果.
finally, .. means of transportation invites (换掉bring秋裤). go to bigger cities and better countries for a better life, so they no longer live with their parents for a long time ... under these circumstances, they are more likely to be influenced by people around them like ... who they might not even be able to get along well after leaving home for several years.
technology has brought us many changes and the decrease of parental influence is one of them.
